Fact Set #1: Pipe fitter
Yesterday, a Springfield pipe fitter, employed by Gross Engineers, suffered third-degree burns when he accidentally touched a 15,000 volt power line with a piece of angle iron as he was installing new pipes.
Duane La Chance, 55, a pipe fitter, suffered third-degree burns yesterday when he accidentally touched a 15,000 volt power line with a piece of angle iron as he was installing new pipes.
Fact Set#2: Car Accident
A driver crossed the center line and struck a
James W. Cunning, 20, was driving south on U.S 63 when Wayne Clay, 19, crossed the
center line and struck his vehicle.
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1) Your "immediate ID" version works better -- you get to the point more quickly.
Delayed ID: Remember not to with a lead with the "when" or "where" of a story. Start with the most important and/or interesting info, generally the "who" and/or "what" of the story.
Also, you don't have to tell me everything in the lead. It's enough to know he's a Springfield pipe fitter -- adding the company name just bogs things down.
2) Ask yourself what makes this story newsworthy -- for example, a simple car accident isn't news, but when someone is seriously injured in a car accident, it is. So focus on the guy who was injured in your leads.
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